My story.

I wanted to write a story and I needed someone to read and comment on improvements.
So here goes, the books is called Fallen Angel.

Angel Fall never wanted to die. There is nothing much you can do if you get shot in the head, is there?

Angel was never the popular girl. She didn't have many friends and never fitted in. She wore old fashioned clothes. Black lacy dresses. White tights. Patented buckle-up shoes. Angel liked to stay indoors and make exquisite outfits for her dolls. They were beautiful gowns of silk and lace in every colour under the sun. Beautiful dresses and skirts. Even shoes and accessories. It was what she was content doing. She only had three dolls : Pearl, a beautiful doll with long flowing blonde hair, rose red lips and blue eyes. Angel usually dressed pearl in a  moss colour velvet smock with white buttons, black tights and white shoes. Pearl also wore a velveteen Alice band in her hair. Midnight was Angel's lookalike doll. Midnight had long pitch black hair swept to one side. She often was dressed in a bewitching gown of navy blue silk and black netting. She also wore black kitten heeled shoes and a black rose in her hair. Her chalky completion and amethyst coloured eyes made her a perfect match for Angel. Sakura was the last doll Angel bought.  Angel bought her three dolls on the same day. Sakura, she didn't buy but she found her in a gutter looking homeless and very lonely. Angel had took her in and restored her so now she had something to smile about. Sakura had short black hair and a shift style red and gold kimono. She wore gold and red cherry blossom in her hair and red embroidered slippers on her feet.

Angel was very content to play with her doll all day long but she was never fully happy.


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Ellie